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Altair stood silently, mesmerized at the events that have unfolded before his eyes. The hulking jet-black figure of X-BA Marduk floated in the air, roaring ominously at the sky.
"What in the world–" he said. He could feel hunks of flesh and fiery debris crumble beneath the feet of his mechanical armor, Gilgamesh, as he began navigating across the blood-strewn plaza.
What he saw was akin to a demon from hell. He could still hear the agonized screams of the dragon ringing in his ears as Marduk toyed with it before splattering its limbs all over the place. This was the same dragon that lay waste to the Upper District and nearly annihilated them just minutes ago.
He had heard about Marduk, about its strange abilities; fascinating to the scientific mind, but terrifying to the human heart. They had called it the "Ultimate Quantum Magician"; and he had just witnessed its first act.

"–Altair!"
He was woken from his daze by a familiar voice over the comm link. "Smith to Altair! Is everyone alright? We lost you for a moment!"
"I'm fine," said Altair, "Can't say the same about the dragon though. What just happened?"
"We're not sure yet. What about Marduk? It's readings are going haywire." said Smith.
"It's–I don't know–acting like some kind of monster!" said Altair.
"Nevermind that–is it damaged?"
Altair surveyed the mechanical beast once more, he could not see a single scratch upon its fuselage–which struck him as strange; he remembered both of them getting battered savagely by the dragon. It was reflected clearly upon his own Battle Armor.
But not Marduk.
"No. It doesn't look damaged, but it looks like it's up for doing a lot of damage soon!" said Altair. By this time, Marduk's roars have become more intense, more primal.
"Don't worry about that. Malak will handle it." said Smith.

It was then that another Battle Armor, Esthar, grabbed hold of Marduk, it's angelic form clasping the demon in a tight embrace.
And the beast fell silent for a moment.

"You can let go of me now." said a voice from within Marduk. "Let's head back to base. I'm tired."
:iconmus0u:
And now something to spark thine interest...

This is part of the prologue to "Anno Peractio" [link] , a science-fantasy project of mine.

Those of you who are familiar with my previous works may have noticed some changes. Few of which are:

- The "superframe" designation has been dropped entirely. It has been replaced by the term "Battle Armor".
- "Battle Armors" are human-sized as opposed to the giant-sized superframes.
- Alexander Sigfried is now Altair Sigfried. His appearance has changed as well; previously typically nordic, now turkic/semitic. He is still adopted, meaning no change in his surname.
- Altair is now the main character.

Comments and Critiques are much appreciated.

EDIT: It seems the formatting is lost. I'll get to when I have the time. (but seriously, dA needs some text editing tools)


"Anno Peractio" and all related material belong to me.
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:icondimensionmoth:
From the get go I really admired this piece one of your best so far. I felt the story was very well written and fluid something lacking in most amateur writers (I struggle with this as well) this layered with very creative and original though I felt it could have had alot more impact more details and something that really grabs the readers attention. The artwork is simply beautiful bold yet subtle filled with deep red and vivid blacks making it pop out at the viewer though a little bit more coloration would really help out a lot. In the end I enjoyed this very much and would love to see this brought to life as a graphic novel or what ever you may do with it.
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:iconhoodiegirl91:
This sounds really promising. I can't wait for more!
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Mood: Wow! *iamrhaza3617 Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
why do I get the sense that a whole lotta property and a lot of people are gonna get thrashed when this story kicks it into high gear?

well done, my friend!
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~DimensionMoth Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
DUDE I love it!
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:icontorr-ture:
No punctuation after an ellipses in dialogue, chief.

"What in the world–"
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=mus0u Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow! For once, something useful in the comments.
Thanks for pointing that out. :)
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